Script Day1-v1

I suck at writing >:[

But it's gotta be done XD So anyway I've written two versions for Yu's blogologue for the beginning and I'm not sure which is better as I approached it differently for Yu in slightly different mindsets. One seems a bit more emotional compared to two but I'll post up both of them anyway.

VERSION 1:

Cutscene: INTRODUCTION

Train, sleeper compartment interior / sunset 

Yu is on the train writing on his laptop (player learns a little about the main character and his situation).  The train is a sleeper train and Yu sits alone in his 1^st class compartment.  He has a very serious look on his face and is very focused on his laptop screen.

Today is the 13^th August.

I am sitting on a train travelling from a family reunion back to the city.

I never really do these things-you know writing. “It’s not a girly diary, it’s a journal or a blog if you want to call it that”, so says Kemi.

I suppose you’d want to know why I’ve decided to start writing at all huh?  Well … I’ll be honest.  It was all my fault no matter what my work mates say.

My profession is a medical intern at the _______ City Hospital. About a week ago a kid was brought into A&E and because of … I … My team leader suggested I take a break.  “It’s Ghost Month soon, why don’t you take this opportunity to visit your family”. So I-

Yu’s laptop battery dies.

Cutscene ends.

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VERSION 2:

Cutscene: INTRODUCTION

Train, sleeper compartment interior / sunset 

Yu is on the train writing on his laptop (player learns a little about the main character and his situation).  The train is a sleeper train and Yu sits alone in his 1^st class compartment.  He has a very serious look on his face and is very focused on his laptop screen.

My name is Yu.

It’s been about a week since that incident at A&E.

According to my sister, writing about my troubles will help me.  Well…here I am.

I am on a train.  I am travelling back to the city after visiting family and relatives for a bit.

I lied about having to go back to work - of course I don’t, since my team leader told me to take a break and use this holiday.

I couldn’t tell them anything.

I couldn’t tell them how I suddenly froze, how my vision went dark…how I failed….because of me we couldn’t….

The kid’s mother screaming and my team sticking up for me.

I couldn’t look them in the eye.

I went to the mother after and apologised for my inability.

I will never forget that face … [or that]- *scream*

Yu’s laptop battery dies.

Cutscene ends.

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Crap.  I forgot to plug in the charger before I started typing.  *Sigh*. Oh well, maybe I’ll go explore the train for a bit and give my legs a stretch…maybe grab a drink too.

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[Laptop]

My laptop is charging at the moment.  By the time I get back I can I should be able to save what I’ve written properly and perhaps watch a movie or something.

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[PA] *PA jingle*

Thank you for travelling with us today. The time now is 17:00 with dry weather conditions at 23º.  We have just reached our journey’s  halfway point and travelling on schedule. We should arrive at our destination tomorrow evening at 18:00. Have a pleasant journey. *PA jingle*

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Game cutscene: KEMI PHONECALL

Train, food carriage interior / sunset 

Close up of the caller ID on Yu’s phone, it shows KEMI.  Split screen with Yu on the left and Kemi on the right.

YU: Hello Kemi.

Kemi: Yu~~~ How are you? Train journey going okay?

Yu: Yes, just had the halfway announcement. Should be back tomorrow evening.

Kemi: That’s great bro! Did the aunties hassle you to look at potential bride pictures again? I’m sorry to leave the reunion earlier than planned.

Yu: Sigh, yes they did but it’s fine.  They didn’t put up a lot of fight as they did you to get me to stay longer though.  

Kemi: Haha yeh … well you know. They’re old so they still have their ‘traditional values’ to uphold.

Yu: Ha tell me about it.  So what was that phone call in the end? Your Boss? Sounded pretty important to leg it back to the city.

Kemi: Yeh I think we’re trying to snoop on that new business politician.

Yu: Be careful, Kemi.

Kemi: No worries Yu! I can look after myself~ Oh yeh! Did you manage to start writing?

Yu: Yes.

Kemi: Did it help?

Yu: A bit. Yes. I think I’ll carry it on for a while longer.

Kemi: That’s brilliant bro! That makes me really happy!  Okay, I gotta dash.  I think we’re starting an interview.

Yu: Okay. Good luck with work Kemi. See ya.

Kemi: Take care!

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(Extra cut scene?)

Kemi is the only one who knows about the incident. I didn’t have the hear to tell our parents anything.  Instead I made up a lame excuse about how the hospital were low on staff which was why I had to leave early.  Kemi had to leave early for her job too … unlike me, she didn’t have to lie.  God, I’m such a state.  I definitely need that drink.

So far version 1 has one vote!